When Jews were taken to concentration camps they Nazis told the Jews that they were being “resettled”. The Nazis didn’t tell them that they were going to be killed.
The Jews were not allowed to take anything they were stripped and left to fight over a pile of second hand clothes. Many of the Jews worked until they died as slave labourers, but even more were killed as soon as they arrived in the concentration camps.
April 26, 2016 at 7:07 pm
This piece of writing is good because you wrote about what happened to the Jews as soon as they arrived at the concentration camp. Also you said that the Jews fought over pile of second hand clothes which is good because you are going into detail.
You also told me that as soon as the Jews were to arrive at the concentration camp, many Jews would be killed and the others that were aloud to live had to become slaves.
What you could improve on is if you extended your writing by adding more information, for example, saying who made people believe that Jews are bad people and should be killed?
How were Jews transported from their homes to the concentration camps?
And adding more information about what happened to Jews.